2016年西城二模情景作文范文荟萃
第二节（20分）
假设你是红星中学的学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，用英文写一篇周记，Dad proposed to fly kites.Pulling the kite lines behind me, running freely on the gra and feeling the mild wind kiing my face, I felt extremely delighted.Mom sat on the gra, with a huge smile on the face; she clapped and cheered for Father and me.
As the evening drew near, we sat together on the gra, waiting to admire the sunset.记述上周日你和父母一起骑车郊游的过程。
注意：词数不少于60。 提示词: 郊区 the suburbs
一、One poible version:
Last Sunday, my parents and I went to the suburbs of Beijing and had a great time together.
To make it a green journey, we all agreed to cycle there.With everything ready, we set out.The warm sunshine and the fresh air put us all in a good mood.
Upon arrival, we got down to our preparation.Dad and I worked together to put up the tent, while Mum set out her homemade food.Everyone was enjoying the pleasant and relaxed family atmosphere in the open air.
After the meal, we couldn’t wait to fly kites.Running and laughing, we watched our kites of different shapes dancing high in the sky.Mum couldn’t help cheering for us.What fun it was!
Dusk fell before we realized it.Seated together before leaving, we quietly watched the golden sunset, wishing to have more weekends like today.
二、学生优秀习作 (19分) Last Sunday, I, together with my parents, rode a bike to the suburbs and enjoyed ourselves, which turned out to be rewarding and unforgettable.Early in the morning, with bags well-packed, we rode alongside the path in the hills.Breathing the fresh air, bathed in the sunlight, we drowned ourselves in the natural beauty.Before long, we arrived at the camping spot.After taking some pictures of the scenery, Father and I got down to putting up the tent, while Mom was fully occupied with preparations for the lunch with the food we brought.With the noon sun shining, sweat streamed down our cheeks and made our T-shirts wet.With our joint effort, the tent was put up and the meal was delicious to enjoy.After lunch, 1 / 2
Seeing the red sun sink slowly into the horizon, a peaceful and happy smile spread over our faces.How I wish I could freeze this moment!
It was through this experience that I exercised myself by biking and enjoyed precious moments with my parents.Though the day we spent was short, the memory I cherished will last long in my mind.
评语：覆盖所有要点，细节补充合理生动，句式丰富，用词准确，描写地道，体现了非常强的语言运用能力。有个别的错误但不影响理解。
（19分）
It was a peaceful sunny day when my parents and I went for a cycling tour in the suburbs.With few people around, the forest was as if welcoming us specially with its natural beauty, embracing us with the cool breeze.Equipped with all neceities in backpacks and totally amazed by the greenne, we cycled further into the forest, ready to discover more hidden beauties.
Soon appeared a piece of clearing behind the trees, and we merrily stopped to get ready for a picnic.Dad and I busied ourselves with setting up the tent, while Mom was occupied in the preparation, spreading out the cloth and cutting food.With everything done, we sat down close to each other to enjoy Mom’s home-made dishes, satisfying both our minds and stomachs.
With a full stomach, Dad suggested we fly our kites, for the wind was picking up, which I instantly agreed.So strings in hands and kites flying against the blue sky, Dad and I raced against each other, just like when I was a kid.Upon seeing this, Mom couldn’t help but applaud for us, her face lighting up with excitement.
How happy time fled! Noticing the sun setting, we sat side by side on the gra to admire the breathtaking view.Little by little, the sun went down as I felt a sense of contentment and joy enveloping the three of us.Suddenly Mom told us she felt so lucky to have us around her.Words failed me at that moment.I came to realized that family was where everyone is concerned with each other, where love always resides.
评语：全文涵盖所有内容及要点，细节补充合理生动。并且能够通过文章传达合理的情感，打动读者，而不仅仅是叙述事实。语言运用能力强，词语句式准确多样。上下文内容连贯，结构严谨紧凑。体现很强的语言素养和写作能力。
(18分)
Last Sunday, I went camping with my parents.That was an unforgettable experience, which will be rooted in my memory.
Setting off early in the morning, each of us rode a bike with bags on our backs.smelling the fragrance of the gra, hearing the singing of the stream, we were totally immersed in the nature.As we rode on, the sunlight flowed through the clouds, and we could feel the warmth of it.So we stopped to put up our tent.My father and I chose a spot to set the tent, while my mother was busy preparing for a picnic.She cut some bread and took out some fruits carefully ,as if she were making a feast.Then, after the picnic, my father and I went to fly the kites.Running besides my father, I could clearly feel my heart floating in the air as the kites going up and down.Everything was quiet and time was frozen at the moment, except for the applause.It was my mother, who was clapping her hands for us.At last, we seated ourselves near a lake and witneed the glorious sunset.I was shocked to see the whole lake colored by the sunlight, shinning smoothly.Seeing the incredible scenery, I even recited some poems at the end of our camping.It was the charm of the nature that made our day! 评语:文章覆盖了所有内容要点，细节补充合理，句式多样，措辞准确自然，虽有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富所致，体现了较强的语言运用能力，段落清晰，内容连贯，书写工整，完全完成了试题规定的任务。
(18分) Last Sunday, my parents and I paid a riding visit to the suburbs.It was a wonderful day, with sun shining on the sky and light breeze.With everything prepared in our bags, we started the journey.
We rode for half an hour when we were delighted to find that the surroundings had gradually changed from tall buildings into mountains and trees.Riding along the road, we were all absorbed in the breathtaking scenery and felt very relaxed.
When it was already noon and we all felt a little tired, we decided to have a rest.We found a gra land under the trees and put up our tent in the shade.It took much effort when my dad and I were trying to put up the tent.In the meanwhile, my mom prepared the lunch for us such as sausages, bread and some fruits, which turned out to be a simple but pleasant meal.
After having lunch, my mom took out the kites from her bag and suggested that we fly the kite.Both my dad and I took a kite and ran acro the gra field to make it fly higher.Seeing we succeed in flying kites, my mom couldn’t help cheering for us.
Time flies.Without our notice, the sun was slowly going down.Sitting down on the ground together, we just watched the sunset quietly and enjoyed this moment of peace.I couldn’t move my eyes from the splendid and beautiful sky and sunlight.What a meaningful day ，for I not only enjoyed the scenery but also spent a wonderful day with my parents.
评语：文章覆盖了所有内容要点，细节补充合理，句式多样，语言流畅自然，不乏生动的描写，体现了较强的语言运用能力，分段合理，内容连贯，完全达到了写作目的。
（18分）
Last Sunday, my parents and I went cycling in the suburbs.Eager to take a fresh breath in nature, we hit the road early in the morning.Feeling free and excited, I took the lead while my 2 / 2
parents were following behind.The sunshine was warm and the scenery alongside was
beautiful.Though burdened with heavy backpacks and tired for riding such a long way, I still felt as light as a feather.
Finally we stopped on a small hill and settled down.It was already in the afternoon.All the bags unpacked, my father and I were busy putting up the tent, while my mother was
preparing for our picnic.She put the blanket on the ground and took out the food in the basket.Then work was soon all done and we enjoyed a delicious lunch.It was really enjoyable to run around freely in the nature, especially when a kite was in hand.My father and I flew the kites energetically as if we were little children.My mother was a little tired, so she just sat there and clapped for our joy.
After a thorough relaxation on the hill, we decided to appreciate the sunset together by the huge lake.Watching the sun disappearing gradually below the horizon, I could sense happine in our hearts.I cherished all the little happy moments that day, as they not only brought us closer to nature but also brought all of our family members even closer, which was most valuable.
评语：语言准确，句式丰富，描写生动。很好地完成了写做任务。
（18分）
Last Sunday, my family decided to put into practice the outing we had long been preparing for.It was a fine day, with the vast fields bathing in mild morning light, promising a most
wonderful journey ahead of us.Packed with some neceities, we rode up the hill, enjoying the fresh breeze while in search of the best spot to settle down for a picnic.
It wasn’t long before we reached our final decision for the picnic spot.Pulling up by the path, I got engaged in setting up the tent with Dad while Mom concentrated on setting snacks prepared for lunch on the carpet spread on the lawn.It was easy at first, yet the hardship of work got lost in the laughter of joy.
Full and relaxed after lunch, Dad and I could well fell the gust of gentle breeze luring us to try out our newly-bought kites.What a pity it would be if we wasted such a fine afternoon not going kiting! So we took out our kites and flew them up and down the hill, chasing and laughing, while Mom watched us from aside, cheering for us and taking great delight in the joy.
At the end of the day came the sunset.The harmony and peace of the scenery was in no way contradictory to our liveline in the afternoon.On the lawn we sat, gathering our memories of daytime and enjoying the last bit of sunshine.It was surely a most
unforgettable outing together.（I think I’ll always remember that day in the suburbs with my parents.It has equipped me with a peaceful mind and that’s the best way to refresh one’s body and mind.）
评语：文章覆盖了所有内容要点，细节补充合理。语言句式准确多样流畅，体现了很强的语言运用能力。上下文连接意识到位，内容连贯，书写工整，完全达到了预期写作目的。
