Thesedays there are so considerate private cars on the roads so that space is block with vehicles.You can see crawling automobiles one after another in your field vision all the time.So some cities want to ban to use the private cars.To my mind, I share with this ideas.
A number of people are against the idea.They think poeing a car can give them a much degree of mobility, and enable the drivers to move aroud, meanwhile save their time.This can make their lives more convinent, flexible and efficient.However to buy and use a car can bring more severe problems.Besides polluting envoronment by emitting agreat deal of exhausted gas and causing traffic accident, they can lean to traffic jam.Every day you can catch sight of endle queues of car crawling one after another through all the main streets, they have the severe effect on every life of people.People may be late for work or school or meeting because of traffic congestion.This situation also lead to some knock-on effects such as high ratio traffic accidents and property damage.In order to improve these situation many cities make regulations to probit to use private cars and recommend to use public transport instead.I think it is a better way to improve traffic jam.Government should take actual steps to increase the efficiency of public traffic, so people would like to accept the public buses.we have the ground to believe that the iue of people concern to traffic congestion may be eradecated.
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2014/3/29
