March 12，2012
Sophia
Self-evaluation
Your name in Chinese:陈婷宇
Your num:65
The time when you started the aignment: 8点
The content
·thesis statement(观点)
The original:
In recent years, tourism can play an important role in booming economy.In my point of view, too much tourism may cause harm or bring about risks to the environment.
For one things, in order to attract tourists, a large pieces of woods were eliminated to build accommodation facilities and other scenery, what’s worse, it breaks the ecological balance of nature, resulting in the shortage of farm land, water and animals.For another, with a large numbers of tourists come into there every year, they have produced all kinds of garbage everywhere and cause more pollution.At last, it may cause the traffic congestion.It can give people bring inconvenience.At the same time, it can cause a lot of trouble.
All in all, too much tourism brings harm to the environment in many ways.So I think it should be balance between tourism development and environment protection.
The revision:At last, it may cause the traffic jam.It can give people bring inconvenience.At the same time, it will come with more a series of related iues.
·related ideas(子观点)
The original: a) in order to attract tourists, a large pieces of woods wereeliminated to build accommodation facilities and other scenery,
b)with a large numbers of tourists come into there every year, they have produced all kinds of garbage everywhere and cause more
pollution.
c)it may cause the traffic congestion.
The revision: a)
b)
c)
·development of ideas through personal experience, expert testimony, example, illustration, cause and effect, facts, comparison, contrast, opinion, statistics, logic and reasoning, known facts(常识)，analogy(类比)
The development of the related idea a(子观点a的论证)
The original: a) facts
The revision: a)
The development of the related idea b(子观点b的论证)
The original: b) cause and effect
The revision: b)
The development of the related idea c(子观点c的论证)
The original: c)personal experience
The revision: c)
Organization
·effectivene of introduction by direct opening(开门见山式)，positive/negative opening(正反表态式)，refutation(驳论式)，background(背景式)，questions(提问式)，number(用数字)，quotation(用引语)，narrowing-down(收网式) To pick up one of 8 methods above by your own writing:
effectivene of introduction by direct opening(开门见山式)
·Logical sequence of ideas/Relations of the three related ideas (三个子观点的关系)By parallel(按照对比)/by order of importance（按照重要性）/by paralleling（按照平行）
To pick up one of three methods above by your own writing:
by paralleling（按照平行)
·conclusion by summary, restatement重申，再次声明, final comment (significance意义，重要性, prediction预言，预测, warning警告，预兆, solution解决方案)To pick up some of 6 methods above by your own writing：restatement，final comment(solution)
The revision:
Grammar problem:
1The simple sentence :1）SV
2)SVO
3)SVOO
4)SVOC
5)SVC
2The compound sentence
3The complex sentence
4The noun clause: 1)subject clause(主语从句)
2)object clause（宾语从句）
3)the predicative clause（表语从句）
4)oppositive clause（同位语从句）
5The restrictive clause
6 The adverbial clause 1)time
2)place
3)cause（原因）
4)effect（结果）
5)purpose
6)degree（程度/比较）
7)manner（方式）
8)conceion（让步）
9)condition(条件)
7Verb 1) tense(时态)
2）aspects（体态）
3）voice（语态）
8 Adj,adv,(比较级，最高级)
9 pron(不定代词的指代)
Your views on your grammar level: just so-so
The strongest points(语法最强项)by your own writing according to 9 grammar problems above(可以用中文写， 并举例说明) ：
擅长简单句和并列句，时态可以把握清楚，
The weakest points(语法最弱项)by your own writing according to 9 grammar problems above（可以用中文写，并举例说明）：
弱项是复杂句，状语从句的让步和方式从句，还有名词从句的同位语不太会写，
Your partner’s view on your grammar level: just so so
The name of your partner in Chinese：赵雪梅
The number of your partner:66
The strongest points(语法最强项)by your own writing according to 9 grammar problems above(可以用中文写， 并举例说明) ：
简单句用的比较熟练，文章中有一处运用比较级，强调了旅游业对环境的危害，
The weakest points(语法最弱项)by your own writing according to 9 grammar problems above（可以用中文写，并举例说明）：
复合句用的很少，而且用词比较简单，缺乏色彩，
The grade you evaluate (按照百分制):68
The time when you finished the aignment:22：10
The total period of what you have focused: 两个小时十分钟
The aignment should be typed and is due before 2 pm on March 13, 2012
