题目：My best Friend
扶沟县秋实高级中学
三．3班陈军宇辅导老师：王倩楠
My best Friend
Li Yan, my best friend, is my clamate.She has big eyes.Her long hair is often plained.Sweet smile is often on her face, makes her more lively.
Li Yan is very clever.She is good at her school subjects.She has wonthe school scholarship twice, I always take her as my model in study.She tells me that we should make good use of time.
Li Yan is kind-hearted and is always ready to helping others.Any student in my cla who has trouble in study likes asking her for help.she doesn＇t like others to praise her, because she thinks what she did is ordinary.I feel proud to have such a friend.
评语：本文第一段第二行中that改为which, 因为在此用which引导非限制性定语从句。
第二段第一行中has改为had, 因为两次获得奖学金应该用过去完成时态。
第三段中helping 改为help, 因为之前的to为动词不定式后应用动词原形。
第三段第二行中so改为but, 因为联系上下文句意在此应表转折。
本文简述我的一位最好的朋友李燕，从她的外貌，学习和人际交往方面展开描述。李燕不但长的漂亮，而且学习优秀，两次获得奖学金，是我学习的典范。另外她心地善良，非常乐于助人，为人谦虚谨慎。本文语句结构精确且用词精炼优美，主题突出，不失一篇经典之作。
